Starts well.
Well, I think the song starts pretty well. Unfortunately it goes downhill from there.
Here are the aspects I like:
-The main piano line is catchy and it sounds like one of those moments where a main character would be thinking up a great idea then putting it into action.
-The second drum loop starting at 1:20 is fantastic. It's up-beat and tight.
-There are some areas where the strings are quite nice. For example, starting at 0:33. They could stand to be turned down a little as they're too much in the foreground. In fact, I have no problems with the strings from then on. They work well with the song.
-The second piano riff at 1:02 is great. Catchy and it really comes alive when the drums come in.
Here are some constructive critiques:
- I think the first drum loop starting at would be really nice without the cowbell. The beat itself is nice and even the congos (bongos...whichever) add a nice element. The cowbell sounds very digital and I'm not fond of the rhythm.
-I'm assuming that the song speeds up at around 0:57 due to the story line so I won't comment there.
-For the second drums loop, it's absolutely ruined by the cowbell and congos/bongos. Very distracting and there's too much commotion.
-A lot of your instruments with exception to the drums need to have some effects on them to give the song some depth. Reverb, delay, stereo enhancing, and panning go a long way when used properly and they can really give your song not only a more naturalistic feel but also a big sense of depth and layers.
Anyway, that's it from me. I hope that wasn't too bad. I find you're on the right track and you have some wonderful ideas. Take this critique for whatever it's worth.
Thanks,
Larkeep